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Mod: Vain Facade
Hero: Carnaval
Environment: Paradise Isle Grand Hotel
Sorry about that. =_= Been working on ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ myself. But now we're back, let's do the thing!
Carnaval
Bio
Should there be "a" after "city's facade"?
A Little Extra
It bugs me slightly that you use "non-target non-character" and "non-character non-target". :P Be consistent! Also, put a comma in between them, whichever direction you go.
Explosive MacGuffin
I'd use "during" rather than "on".
I really like the flavor text for Improvisational Theater. :) Also, "I know who you are." "Me too." on Rising Action is a fantastic exchange. XD
I think Suspicious Body Double has an extra return at the start of the game text?
Okay, he's looking pretty good, so let's also do...
Paradise Isle
Golden Dawn Casino
I guess I would be remiss if I didn't point out using 'player' should necessitate "they draw" and "their hero deals themselves". Or you could just make it "1 hero chooses", which is shorthand I am always here for. :)
Great story told via these cards! No further notes!
Hero: Ember
Villain: Doomsayer
Finally got this arted and published! It's a single environment deck, "The Body"
Ember
Wow! I'm getting the sense from her backstory that you put a lot of work into research for it. :D
I'd change "but" in "but when she looked behind her" to "and".
Man, what a great concept.
Brimstone Down
This isn't a major change, but I do think "...where X is the number of decks your cards and powers have revealed cards from this turn." sounds a little better.
Burning Wings
I'm not sure I'm understanding the ongoing effect. It's every time she deals damage, if it would be reduced, increase it instead? Or afterward, I guess. But if there's more than one effect reducing that damage, say damage reduction and a damage debuff, you don't get a second +1?
From the Ashes
"drops" should be "is reduced to" or "would be reduced to", depending on how it's coded.
I'm quite impressed with the icons you made for this deck. Not only does it seem like you've upped your game with what shapes you use, but you also always managed to keep the lighter areas from disappearing into the yellow backgrounds. :) Dang, but she's cool.
Doomsayer
Hm! As I'm looking at his bio, there's no image, which means I guess a cutout is missing? Or does he just not show up during the first half of the fight?
Bladewight
I also take it these nemeses aren't meant to flip, since both sides are the same? Anyway, you should have "at one time" or "at once" after "5 or fewer damage" for maximum correctness.
Countless Words
I recommend reversing the order in which the rules are written here, simply because the 4-card one is an instant effect while the others are ongoing. Also, I'd replace "When" with "If" in both of the ongoing effects. I'm not sure why it makes a difference to me, you don't have to.
Doomsayer character card
Technically, you don't need the "heroes win" clause, because defeating the main villain is the standard win rule. Goes for both sides.
Blood-Bound Fate
I think the second "When a hero would..." clause can just be "Otherwise"? Because the "if that hero has not been dealt damage" clause takes care of "What happens when I go to deal damage but don't deal it to myself?"
Dictating Destiny
Again, I suggest swapping the first two sections, just for clarity of what to expect.
Futile Efforts
I assume that should say "Reduce damage dealt by heroes by 1."? "Hero damage" can really be interpreted either way, not standard wording.
Someone in Need is exactly the same as A Friendly Face. Intentional? Why two different cards then?
Whew, he looks extremely complicated and probably quite difficult! But there we go, you didn't wait five months this time! :D
I assume your sister doesn't have a relevant account name, so I will just credit her as you have.
Absorption
Should start with "When this card enters play", I assume that's how it works.
Also, in the flavor text, I notice Luminary is mentioned even though Tachyon is in the art, and this isn't the only card where that happens. (Acid-Chyme too.)
Homeostasis
Same as Absorption. In the flavor text, Sky-Scraper's name should technically have a hyphen.
Killer T Cell
Unless the aim is that you don't want it to be able to take reaction damage, this should say "this card deals". I mean, environment targets usually do the damage themselves, generally speaking.
I assume Red Blood Cell's start of turn text is just there in case it comes into play outside the environment turn? Because otherwise it just destroys itself and does the single-target heal.
Rising Blood Pressure
Same as Absorption.
Stomach
"Targets" is more standard than "Any target". In the flavor text, needs a comma after "roiling".
I've already tried this deck once, and it's pretty cool. :) Great flavor, though I never saw any organs, so it didn't do a ton. XD It's also really neat to see a deck designed with canon, Cauldron and custom heroes in its story, that's a new one by me.
Originally she was credited with her Steam username, but she asked for that not to be included, and just to be credited as my sister.
Yeah, we were conflicted about that before publishing. The flavor text was written before any of the art was created, and I didn't ask for specific characters on specific cards from the artist, I just gave her a list of characters with reference images that would be good to include somewhere. We decided to leave the flavor text alone, since the text doesn't necessarily need to reflect the exact scene depicted in the art.
The start of turn text is in case it gets played out of turn, but also Brain lets you prevent it from destroying itself. It's a kind of tradeoff for Brain - you could lose the game, but you can also get massive benefits from Red Blood Cells.
Thanks for the feedback! The other changes on Absorption, Homeostasis, Killer T-Cell, Rising Blood Pressure, and Stomach have all been published.
I don't recall how much research I put into her backstory, but I remember spending a lot of time doing linguistic research.
Done!
Correct! If it's a -1 from one source, or a -2 from one source, or a -1 from one and a -1 from another, etc., etc., you only ever get +1. It's like a lesser irreducible.
Icons? Like the images on the individual cards? Or her nemesis icon? I don't remember doing anything special with the card icons compared to what I normally do.
This is an engine issue. Countless Words is a character card, and it has no image, so half the time the bio shows no image, half the time it shows Doomsayer. I guess Acolytes, Bladewight, and Ingini also complicate it. Either way it's not really fixable.
I wanted absolutely no confusion about which side the nemeses enter play on and didn't want to deal with confusion on Doomsayer flipping his character cards, so I just made them both the same. Added the "at once".
Fixed!
The rule seems unclear to me in cases where there are multiple character cards, so I wanted to avoid confusion about whether or not you had to defeat the nemeses once Doomsayer was defeated
It can't be "otherwise" because any previous self-damage counts. E.g., Fury has a few ways of hitting herself and then hitting Doomsayer, and she doesn't have to hit herself again to hit him while he has Blood-Bound Fate up.
Yeah, it's a thing. Originally there were slight differences to the cards but it seemed confusing. I cut the unique effects but wasn't willing to collapse them to two copies of one card, as I wanted to showcase Doomsayer taking different forms for different purposes.
I may not be the best judge of his complexity, but he's deceptively easy. He seems much harder than he is.
He starts off completely impossible, but at some point in nearly every fight, just suddenly loses his teeth.
Yeah, the site you use to make the symbols for the card art, I can't remember what it's called, but these seem considerably more complex than anything that came before them. :)
Figured!
Okay, fair then.
Okay then!
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