Hatless Problem (Saxxy 2017: Comedy)
 
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"Animation/Direction - Asiro1 (Asiro yea on Youtube)

Music:

Team Fortress 2 - Dapper Cadaver
Team Fortress 2 - A Little Heart to Heart
Team Fortress 2 - TF2 Saxxy 2011 Theme
Team Fortress 2 - It Hates Me So Much

Made and rendered in Source Filmmaker
Post-production done in Blender"
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11 Comments
Asiro1  [author] Mar 13 @ 9:53am 
Thanks
Anyar Mar 13 @ 9:25am 
Not too bad, but could be improved.
Asiro1  [author] Mar 11 @ 6:01am 
I will try to improve with every new video.
Cyndaneerヒノアラシ Mar 10 @ 10:07pm 
I feel like the thoughts for the video is scattered every where. Maybe try writing a list or a script to organize the thoughts.
Asiro1  [author] Mar 9 @ 9:01am 
Thank you!
KringeKrieg Mar 9 @ 8:55am 
Looks like you put a lot of effort into it, especially for your amount of hours. Pretty good camera angles as well. Nice job!
Asiro1  [author] Mar 9 @ 5:59am 
Yeah true,i probably should've done some sketches, I have some ideas for next videos too.Thanks for the feed back
Knusperfrosch Mar 9 @ 5:15am 
Have you tried working with a storyboard? Make some simple sketches of every scene, like a comic. Not only does it help deciding on camera angles beforehand, it gives you a rough estimate of how long a scene is.

Speaking as a writer, tthe rule is "never be afraid to cut something", to prune back superfluous words or rambling sentences. Sometimes, a paragraph or scene that worked so well in our head turns out to be out of place and breaks the pacing of the story, then it has to go. It can still go on the pile marked "ideas for later use". :)
Asiro1  [author] Mar 9 @ 2:38am 
Thank you for the opinion, I appreciate that.
Knusperfrosch Mar 9 @ 1:14am 
The animation still needs work, unless you are going for a cartoonish movement for comedy purposes in places.
The story is basic, but nice, but I think this would have fit the 1 min Short category more.
This could have been achieved by two things:
By an overhaul of the script, tightening the plot down to the most important bits (Newbie Heavy decides he needs a hat to be taken seriously, tries to steal a hat but fails but manages to prove himself by being brave, so the team presents him with a hat).
Avoid "empty" seconds where nothing much happens. Character is sad? Don't show him sitting around moping for 10 seconds, shorten it to 5 seconds, or cut to his face showing the emotion.

The Saxxy Awards are a short movie contest, the skill is to tell a story in as short as time as possible.