[POETRY] "TELL ME"

[Shlim Sady]

I wrote a love-song; kinda. More like a commentary on the human experience, and the uncertainty that's inherent in every interaction we have with each other. Honesty is nothing but a belief, as you can only concretely know YOU'RE being honest. Everything outside of your subjective experience from other subjective experiencers is reliant on their willingness to be transparent. Anyone know/make something similar?

Skies bend backwards, burn to purple
Tracing footsteps, chasing circles
Whispers fill a cup of air
Your shadow dances, unaware
We fold the light, we twist the morning
Eyes meet glass that cracks, now mourning
Counting fractures in the floor
Reflections always crave for more

Tell me what you left in echoes
I’m collecting broken halos
Tell me where you buried flame
Hiding from the sound of names
Smoke can kiss the ground or linger
Truth is just a crooked finger
Hands can hold but never know
Pointing toward the place we go

Fingers fumble for the strings
Night’s a bird without its wings
A tune that bends, it never lands
Silent, slipping through our hands
Maps with edges torn and fraying
Yet here we are, forever staying
Mark the place where dreams collapse
Chasing echoes, dodging traps

Tell me what you left in echoes
I’m collecting broken halos
Tell me where you buried flame
Hiding from the sound of names
Smoke can kiss the ground or linger
Truth is just a crooked finger
Hands can hold but never know
Pointing toward the place we go

A crack in time, it folds, it shivers
We lock our voices deep in rivers
Like leaves pressed tight between the page
Tied to stone, but not to cage
The stars, they fall but never break
We watch them burn then disappear
Each one a wish we’ll never say
Like words we almost gave away

Tell me what you left in echoes
I’m collecting broken halos
Tell me where you buried flame
Hiding from the sound of names
Smoke can kiss the ground or linger
Truth is just a crooked finger
Hands can hold but never know
Pointing toward the place we go

If you hear me in the hollow
Find me where the silence follows
In the breath between the chords
Or in the letters of your words
I’m the smoke, the broken measure
We seek the fire, but find the ember
The space that silence always holds
In the ash, the story folds

https://suno.com/song/d2e8512e-eba7-487b-8294-feb7e7823216

The third song in "IS THIS HELL?"

https://suno.com/playlist/f5014a25-f7fe-4ea5-8a49-755363fd21c3

[Merci]

Bumping to tell you I think you should stop making these threads

[Shlim Sady]

Originally posted by Jelly:

Bumping to tell you I think you should stop making these threads

It's kinda cringe that you went looking for it then, isn't it?

[Merci]

Originally posted by Shlim Sady:

Originally posted by Jelly:

Bumping to tell you I think you should stop making these threads

It's kinda cringe that you went looking for it then, isn't it?

I was looking for non political thread to post on

But what I found was even worse xd

[Shlim Sady]

Originally posted by Jelly:

Originally posted by Shlim Sady:

It's kinda cringe that you went looking for it then, isn't it?

I was looking for non political thread to post on

But what I found was even worse xd

Well, I'm not your dad and I don't like you. Go find a fix for your degradation kink somewhere else. This is the last of the attention I'll be giving you

[Merci]

Originally posted by Shlim Sady:

Originally posted by Jelly:

I was looking for non political thread to post on

But what I found was even worse xd

Well, I'm not your dad and I don't like you. Go find a fix for your degradation kink somewhere else. This is the last of the attention I'll be giving you

Why are you upset it's not even you who made the song.. the ai should be the one upset xd

[Boblin the Goblin]

Originally posted by Jelly:

Originally posted by Shlim Sady:

Well, I'm not your dad and I don't like you. Go find a fix for your degradation kink somewhere else. This is the last of the attention I'll be giving you

Why are you upset it's not even you who made the song.. the ai should be the one upset xd

Steam does need to crack down on threads just posting AI slop.

[tom blu]

Rhyme schemes are boring and this legitimately sounds like something written by A.I.

2/10.

[Shlim Sady]

Originally posted by Boblin the Goblin:

Originally posted by Jelly:

Why are you upset it's not even you who made the song.. the ai should be the one upset xd

Steam does need to crack down on threads just posting AI slop.

Originally posted by mf tom:

Rhyme schemes are boring and this legitimately sounds like something written by A.I.

2/10.

https://www.zerogpt.com/

https://quillbot.com/ai-content-detector

https://copyleaks.com/ai-content-detector

https://writer.com/ai-content-detector/

https://www.scribbr.com/ai-detector/

It's weird how the lot of you that critique so harshly couldn't make something a quarter as decent. Why don't you try?

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Originally posted by Boblin the Goblin:

Originally posted by Jelly:

Why are you upset it's not even you who made the song.. the ai should be the one upset xd

Steam does need to crack down on threads just posting AI slop.

Remember op tried to pass off a legit eminem freestyle as his own/A.I..

[Boblin the Goblin]

Originally posted by Shlim Sady:

Originally posted by Boblin the Goblin:

Steam does need to crack down on threads just posting AI slop.

Originally posted by mf tom:

Rhyme schemes are boring and this legitimately sounds like something written by A.I.

2/10.

https://www.zerogpt.com/

https://quillbot.com/ai-content-detector

https://copyleaks.com/ai-content-detector

https://writer.com/ai-content-detector/

https://www.scribbr.com/ai-detector/

It's weird how the lot of you that critique so harshly couldn't make something a quarter as decent. Why don't you try?

Claiming this was made is really stretching the meaning of that word.

You don't need to create something to critique it. This was posted in an open forum, people are free to critique it.

[Boblin the Goblin]

Originally posted by Hi! I'm Chucky, Want to play?:

Originally posted by Boblin the Goblin:

Steam does need to crack down on threads just posting AI slop.

Remember op tried to pass off a legit eminem freestyle as his own/A.I..

Oh, that was a different user. Similar name though.

[Shlim Sady]

Originally posted by Boblin the Goblin:

Originally posted by Shlim Sady:

https://www.zerogpt.com/

https://quillbot.com/ai-content-detector

https://copyleaks.com/ai-content-detector

https://writer.com/ai-content-detector/

https://www.scribbr.com/ai-detector/

It's weird how the lot of you that critique so harshly couldn't make something a quarter as decent. Why don't you try?

Claiming this was made is really stretching the meaning of that word.

You don't need to create something to critique it. This was posted in an open forum, people are free to critique it.

https://i.kym-cdn.com/entries/icons/original/000/021/665/DpQ9YJl.png

[tom blu]

Originally posted by Shlim Sady:

https://www.zerogpt.com/

https://quillbot.com/ai-content-detector

https://copyleaks.com/ai-content-detector

https://writer.com/ai-content-detector/

https://www.scribbr.com/ai-detector/

It's weird how the lot of you that critique so harshly couldn't make something a quarter as decent. Why don't you try?

I'm not saying it was written by A.I. I'm just saying that it sounds like it was, i.e. it sounds simplistic and uninspired. Again, the rhyme schemes are boring. A-A, B-B rhymes aren't very interesting. If you're going that route then the actual content needs to be top tier, whicht it isn't.

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Originally posted by Boblin the Goblin:

Originally posted by Hi! I'm Chucky, Want to play?:

Remember op tried to pass off a legit eminem freestyle as his own/A.I..

Oh, that was a different user. Similar name though.

I think same person different account.

[Boblin the Goblin]

Originally posted by Hi! I'm Chucky, Want to play?:

Originally posted by Boblin the Goblin:

Oh, that was a different user. Similar name though.

I think same person different account.

That's a possibility.