Is my Character a Mary Sue? (Gary Stu?)

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I've made this character, Andre for a comic I'm writing, but I'd like some thoughts from other people whether this character is a Gary Stu or not. this a quite a long read, but I do ask you to read all of it, because there are somethings that need explaining, and sorry if there are any spelling or grammar errors.

Character's Apperence: http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/filedetails/?id=863899740&fileuploadsuccess=1
Sorry, still pretty novice when it comes to art and drawing.

Andre Nagol Bio:

Gender: Male
Age: 14
Nationality: Asian-American
Race: Human/Motor Vehicle (No, Seriously)
Class: Lower Middle (Formerly Upper)
Magic: None
Occupation: Bartender
Birthday: 29/1/1972-2
Height: 5'9”
Blood Type: B+ (Or Kerosene for Right side of body)
Alignment: Neutral
Authority Status: Neutral/Suspicious
Criminal Status: Very Bad




Character Pros:
Right Arm and Right Eye are Copper and Tin
Trustworthy (When you get to know him)
Friendly
An good shot
An alright Mechanic

Character Flaws:
A bit Sluggish when his Right arm is attached (Due to how heavy it is)
Cannot see out of his Right eye
Right arm needs kerosene to work
A somewhat lack of remorse under certain circumstances
Not very hopeful
Not very strong
Depressed

Character Backstory:
Andre grew up not knowing his parents, I know, I know. Generic backstory, but Andre is not
on a quest to find his parents, he really couldn't care less about them.
He grew up in New York, a wealthy man adopted him off the streets, only days after birth.
The man loved Andre, took him in and raised him like his own, spoiled him, cared for him.
The man owned a bar, in a poor town in Boston, the man had a heart of gold, he would sometimes let the homeless have a drink on the house.
Andre and the man would travel all around America, Boston, Seattle, Las Vegas, ect
but Andre decided that Boston was his favorite, because the bar was there.
But, one day when Andre turned 9, on the way to a party joint, they were in a car crash, the crash killed the man, and left Andre with a crushed right arm, and burned the right side of his face, rendering the right eye blind, and the arm unusable.
When Andre turned 12, he looked unrecognizable as a human, he got pushed around by other kids and adults, he found out that his father's bar was closing down, he would miss the place, he didn't want to let go, so he made the terrible mistake of borrowing money from the Mafia, he bought the Bar, and also paid for surgery for a mechanical arm.
He was not a registered human however, he lied about his age to get the bar, he said he was 20, he looked 20, and it was hard to tell, because of all the scars on his face from the burns, and his voice was quite deep for his age.
So he used the majority of the money he borrowed to buy the bar.
After owning the bar for about a week, he realized that his scared face was scaring away customers, and the fact that the fuel orifice for his arm had to be put in his eye socket, so with the rest of his money, he went bought a copper plate for his eye, with black tinted glass window, resembling an eye.
2 years of owning the bar, he now claims his age is 22, but really, he's 14.
He tries not to let the death of his adoptive father bother him, but he just thinks to himself “I did have a pretty good childhood, I grew up with a silver spoon in my mouth, lucky I wasn't killed, rich people aren't very liked around here.”
And not knowing his birth parents? He just doesn't care.
And thinking back on his adoptive father, he always wore a dark purple suit, so in memory of his adoptive father, he'll dye the tip of his hair the same shade of purple every once in awhile.

This next part is just about the world that this character is in, you don't have to read this part, but it might answer some questions you have about this bio.

Story of Universe:

After the World as we know it ended, cause of which was pollution, the Christian God wanted to give humans another chance, so he reset the world, every year being followed by a -2, (e.g. 1999-2) he left his new creation to evolve, and make itself, he returned and realized the place was a trainwreck, worst than the original, pollution was horrid, way worse than before.
He then decided to make a new species and a knew world and abandon the Human world.
But he did not want to make the humans suffer too much, he asked other gods from other regions to watch over the human world, such as Buddha, Allah, Zeus, The Devil Himself and many others to watch over it, and make sure it doesn't become too much of a trainwreck, the other gods agreed for the time being and stayed on, what we'll call, “Earth 2” for reference.
Some of the gods roam Earth 2, disguised as humans to study on where the Christian God might have gone wrong.

Basically, it's a mostly worse version of Earth right now, we've advanced in certain things, such as energy, mining and most of all, Warfare.
There have been a total of 4 World Wars.
Pollution is so bad that the sky is no longer a bright blue, but a brown, sickly color.
And where the story is now, people are only now, working on being more efficient in energy, being more green friendly, in this time of piece, there doesn't seem to be any signs of a WW5 happening anytime soon.


Things we've advanced in:
Nucular Energy
Motor Vehicles (Speed and Endurance wise)
Human enhancements
Drugs (Good and Bad)

Things we're behind in:
Weaponry (Even though we had a lot of wars, that also means there was no time to study and make more efficient firearms, and other munitions, firearms right now are stuck in the Earth 1's WW1 and 2 Stages)
Tech and Computers
Telephones (Communication is still done through traditional letters or radio)
Laws (They're pretty bad, and the cops are basically as bad as the crims at this point)
Anti-Septic (they do have basic anti-septic, but you're still taking a risk by getting surgery or similar)
Motor Vehicles (Efficiency and Gas mileage wise)

That's all for now, I look forward to seeing your opinions, and I am open to critisim. And again, sorry if there are any spelling or grammar mistakes.

[⋆˙⟡SPARKLEPUP✧˖°.]

you didn't even mention the failure of a son of satan, Blue... me?

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Escrito originalmente por Qualimer:

i usually dont say this but the premise seems interesting tbh

but how does the right side of his body use kerosene and the left use blood when its in a circulatory system
wouldn't they mix together

It was just a reference on how his arm uses kerosene.

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Escrito originalmente por GTHG_DeathBlade:

you didn't even mention the failure of a son of satan, Blue... me?

Well, that's your job. You should put up the bio for your character, I don't know your character as much as you.

[Thop]

Escrito originalmente por Insanity Wolf-Chan:

She's a black unicorn. She's black because I had a horse that was (gasp and shock horror) black with a cute little white star on her fore-head. The red in her hair was taken from another character I made many years earlier who wore a red trench-coat.

People just see the black coat and the red stripe in her mane and immediately accuse me of making an edgy OC with a dark and tragic backstory.

They never get to the part where she grew up in a palace in the middle of a winter wonderland. Her parents and 11 siblings are alive and well. And she's currently living in the fantasy equivalent of Hawaii.

LOL, thought you meant like it was some off the cuff racist remark or something...fight me.

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Escrito originalmente por ¿dlǝɥ:

Escrito originalmente por Insanity Wolf-Chan:

She's a black unicorn. She's black because I had a horse that was (gasp and shock horror) black with a cute little white star on her fore-head. The red in her hair was taken from another character I made many years earlier who wore a red trench-coat.

People just see the black coat and the red stripe in her mane and immediately accuse me of making an edgy OC with a dark and tragic backstory.

They never get to the part where she grew up in a palace in the middle of a winter wonderland. Her parents and 11 siblings are alive and well. And she's currently living in the fantasy equivalent of Hawaii.

LOL, thought you meant like it was some off the cuff racist remark or something...fight me.

Heh, that user got banned, don't know why though.

[Thop]

Escrito originalmente por LogaNiceGamer:

Escrito originalmente por ¿dlǝɥ:

LOL, thought you meant like it was some off the cuff racist remark or something...fight me.

Heh, that user got banned, don't know why though.

EX DEEE, I wonder why...probably cuz he was a furry...

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Escrito originalmente por ¿dlǝɥ:

Escrito originalmente por LogaNiceGamer:

Heh, that user got banned, don't know why though.

EX DEEE, I wonder why...probably cuz he was a furry...

There's nothing wrong with furries, they usually stay in their community, they've never bothered me.

[Thop]

Escrito originalmente por LogaNiceGamer:

Escrito originalmente por ¿dlǝɥ:

EX DEEE, I wonder why...probably cuz he was a furry...

There's nothing wrong with furries, they usually stay in their community, they've never bothered me.

IT WAS FURRY RACISIM! Just like the oc being black, it was because he (she?) WAS A FURRY! Reporting all mods to Gaben for furrisim...

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Escrito originalmente por ¿dlǝɥ:

Escrito originalmente por LogaNiceGamer:

There's nothing wrong with furries, they usually stay in their community, they've never bothered me.

IT WAS FURRY RACISIM! Just like the oc being black, it was because he (she?) WAS A FURRY! Reporting all mods to Gaben for furrisim...

u wot?

[Teasel]

For some reason I enjoyed reading about Andre and his world.

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Escrito originalmente por subterranean:

For some reason I enjoyed reading about Andre and his world.

Glad you enjoyed :)

[♡♥♡Wei♡♥♡]

Alright, I edited some of the Pros and cons, tell me what you think.

[A Distinguished Axolotl]

The general believability of a 12 year old being 20 is very damn skim imho, no matter how scarred they are, and I don't see why you bought up this character killing people. The character itself though isn't bad and is basically part attack helicopter. Best of luck to you in your writings ^w^

[A Distinguished Axolotl]

Escrito originalmente por subterranean:

For some reason I enjoyed reading about Andre and his world.

Tbh it reminds me a lot of the shadowrun world

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Escrito originalmente por A Distinguished Axolotl:

The general believability of a 12 year old being 20 is very damn skim imho, no matter how scarred they are, and I don't see why you bought up this character killing people. The character itself though isn't bad and is basically part attack helicopter. Best of luck to you in your writings ^w^

Thank you for your opinion, I have made further adjustments.