The Rainbow Quest: A FNaF World FanFiction

[Party Poison]

Hey guys! I am currently writing a FNaF World FanFic called The Rainbow Quest. It has a real story, and is not a joke or a lemon, and while I know that most of you will make fun of it anyways, I encourage you to give it a read. Also, while I know that this is probably impossible, I would die of excitement if Scott gave it a read. Hope you enjoy it!
Link: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/12125595/1/The-Rainbow-Quest-A-FNaF-World-FanFiction

[Circle of Justice ⚖]

Um, this is advertisment though.

[Rollerwings]

Hi from a fellow fanfic writer! This is a really nice start, but if I may offer some concrit, there are a few events in the story that seem a little too random and they don't fit that well into the plot. The scene where Foxy came out fighting with a knife just didn't fit in with the rest of the story because there wasn't any real lead-up to why he would be that aggressive. There were also a few scenes that included what seemed like unneeded "product placement," such as when Chica watched a specific movie on TV without any explanation given as to why that movie particularly appealed to her.

But the overall story involving characters being dropped into some odd fantasy world and trying to figure out how and why they got there is really cool. I don't want to sound too negative and you have a great story going on here! Keep on writing.