Shou's Stories: Typos/Bugs Reporting Thread

[Xelestial]

Please place any further ones found here. Thank you for your help in improving the game!

[Nightingale]

I just started reading Shou's story, so I figured I'll help out in spotting typos and other grammatical errors. Here's the ones I've found so far.

Just in case it's not clear:
*The "..." (ellipsis) means that there's text before or after what I'm writing, which I'm not including. I'm just focusing on the part that needs to be corrected.
*The "quotation marks" are just added to diferentiate between the ingame dialogue and my comments.

Prologue:
1) Tsubasa: "...just have play it safe then." Should be: "...just have to play it safe then."

CH.1 &2

1) In the first texts from Shou: "I got home and I thought I should check with you." Should be: "I got home and thought I should check on you."
Unless it's intentional to have him use incorrect grammar (character quirk?).

2) Tsubasa's thoughts: "Even in text from Shou seems to be very...well, him." Should be: "Even in writing, Shou seems to be very..." or "Even texts from Shou seems to be very..."

3) Tsubasa's thoughts: "It's helped me a little in learning more about this new world I've been thrown into." This is awkwardly phrased. Perhaps it would be better: "It's helped me to learn a little about this new world I've been thrown into."

4) Tsubasa's thoughts: "...hard to believe all of this is really real." Get rid of the "really", since real is sufficiently powerful. So it should read: "...all of this is real."
After that there's a line that has: "...the only real noticable difference..." Get rid of the "real" again since it's unnecessary.

5) After Tsubasa's meltdown. Takumi: "...I'm just going forget what I saw, Professor K." Should be: "...I'm just going to forget what I saw, Professor K."

6) Tsubasa's thoughts: "At distinctly remembering slamming..." Get rid of the "At". Should be: "Distinctly remembering slamming..."

Aditional note: The comma before a name/person (vocative) indicates that Shou/Hikaru is talking to Taku, rather than Shou/Hikaru talking about Taku. You have plenty of these slips all over, but I'm only putting these here.

7) Shou: "Not cool Taku." Should be: "Not cool, Taku."
Hikaru: "That's enough Takumi." Should be: "That's enough, Takumi."

8) Tsubasa's thoughts: "What the hell was he carrying a..." Should be: "Why the hell was he carrying a..."

9) Tsubasa's thoughts: "...people talking about was how cool..." Should be: "...people talking about how cool..."

10) Shinji: "It's true that most people only can utilize one element but being able..." Should be: "It's true that most people can only use one element, but being able..."

[Xelestial]

I have implemented what changes I thought were appropriate (and some were apparently already changed). These are more grammar improvements more than typos though and would require a rewriting of the entire route to improve them all past these chapters. Unfortunately, we don't have the development time, but if any are brought to attention, I will always consider them.

I am the editor for the entire game and I do not claim that I am an "expert" in grammar, as my prior training nor my studies have not gone into some of the depth of which you speak here. Unfortunately because we develop full time, I don't yet have time to study further, but I am open to hearing more, always. Despite my shortcomings as an editor, hopefully the stories remain enjoyable for the average audience.

As an aside, I also have learned about the comma bit since the writing of this route, which if you continued to play our stories, you've probably seen. Hopefully you've seen an improvement in overall grammar as our stories go on.

[ReaperRei]

Is this where I should report that while running Shou's route an "exception has occurred" notice popped up?

Here is what is says:

I'm sorry, but an uncaught exception occurred.

While running game code:
  File "renpy/common/00library.rpy", line 253, in say
    who(what, interact=interact, *args, **kwargs)
Exception: Say has image attributes (u'Practical', u'Magic', u'Application'), but there's no image tag associated with the speaking character.

-- Full Traceback ------------------------------------------------------------

Full traceback:
  File "script.rpyc", line 678, in script call
  File "scenes/shou/shou_s1e2.rpyc", line 517, in script
  File "C:\Program Files (x86)\Steam\steamapps\common\Mystic Destinies Serendipity of Aeons\renpy\ast.py", line 624, in execute
    renpy.exports.say(who, what, interact=self.interact, *args, **kwargs)
  File "C:\Program Files (x86)\Steam\steamapps\common\Mystic Destinies Serendipity of Aeons\renpy\exports.py", line 1156, in say
    renpy.store.say(who, what, *args, **kwargs)
  File "renpy/common/00library.rpy", line 253, in say
    who(what, interact=interact, *args, **kwargs)
  File "C:\Program Files (x86)\Steam\steamapps\common\Mystic Destinies Serendipity of Aeons\renpy\character.py", line 854, in __call__
    self.resolve_say_attributes(False, wanted=speaking)
  File "C:\Program Files (x86)\Steam\steamapps\common\Mystic Destinies Serendipity of Aeons\renpy\character.py", line 775, in resolve_say_attributes
    raise Exception("Say has image attributes %r, but there's no image tag associated with the speaking character." % (attrs,))
Exception: Say has image attributes (u'Practical', u'Magic', u'Application'), but there's no image tag associated with the speaking character.

Windows-8-6.2.9200
Ren'Py 6.99.13.2187
Mystic-Destinies 0.2.5

I could chose to ignore it and nothing seems to really have happened but I thought I'd report it anyway.

[X]

I'm getting the same error as XiraRai, again ignoring it works but I believe that there should be an image there? Since the text then refers to something in it.

[Lemon]

I got the same error as XiraRai and queenxerela, and ignoring it worked for me too, game is going on like everything's ok