Author request for all typos and bugs

[EricMoser_CCHAuthor]

If you ran across a bug or typo, can you list it in this thread so I can keep them all together?

Thus far, the biggest bugs I've seen listed are...

1) Notebook violence achievement
2) Paragraph repeat in Stunner apartment date scene
3) "No ranged attack" during Rain/Shine fight
4) Hmmm/Shhh point is miscalculated in one of the Secret study sessions (the second one, I think?)

Has anyone ran into an additional bug?

Also typos, I think "rugrats" was spelled wrong but I can't remember any others. Can you post any typos you encountered here, preferably with a little context so I can more easily find them?

Thanks so much!

Eric

[Grey]

"Your punch glances against her cheek of Origami's murderer, barely connecting."
at the hospital scene after origami gets confetti'd and the MC fails to punch the contrarian due to low pow

the rugrats typo is when you ask the contrarian about her powers.

Somehow she looks younger without any googles or mask concealing her features.
when DG removes her mask after the leader vote

Soon, you'll be back in the fray, trying to complete with Zenith classmates as the only normal student at the school.
epilogue 3 after selecting MC's opinion on the future.

[Grey]

"They lower their voices as the man called Crook points to cloud."
to the cloud* during the CTF-game

"Her pale pinks lips curl into a slow smile as she reassures you, ..."
when consoling tress, after losing the CTF-game.

Edit:
"having narrowly avoiding crushing the bleachers"
avoided*
mentioned in the first HELL class

"See you there in an half-hour"
reads weird, "see you there in half an hour"?
said by mcormick at the end of the first HELL class.

[jmvbento]

Not a typo per se, but when Tress shows her powers in the van heading for Capture the Flag, it says four pairs of eyes follow her hair's movement. I doubt Tress is following her own hair, so unless that fourth pair belongs to McCormick (a possibility), there should only be three pairs of eyes.

[JadeCiku]

Not sure if this is a bug or it is like that because most of the time when a choice is not available, it is not visible.

Archtype : Acrobat
Gender : Female

1) Page : At the page where I am to select uniform.
Description : The selection "a revealing outfit covering just enough to avoid arrest" is visible but not selectable. Text appears in a lighter shade of grey instead of the regular black.

2) Page :At the page where "What extra touch do you add?"
Description: "leather thigh high boots with three inch heels" is grayed out.

[Grey]

"After all, the Dozen was already untouchable."
were*
when the MC's fathers' past is told in detail.

"you'll have focus on your offensive abilities"
you'll have to focus on ...*
4th block of text when inviting c-wom to join the study group.

"What do you?"
what do you do?
when studying HELL with mob and origami the first time, when origami presents the pretend scenario.

"want you to or your insurance company to pay"
get rid of the first 'to'.
after selecting hiding behind origami during the first HELL study group session.

"but never averting her eyes from sidewalk,"
from the sidewalk*
3rd block of text during the first defense studygroup with stoic and C-wom.

"The whistle sounds and coach barks"
the coach*
after failing to block the players during the first defense studygroup.

"You're overwhelmed by the nervous energy in the Room 102"
in room 102*
when prompted to select who you want to listen to right before taking the first HELL test

"Students chatter and try to cram in some last minute studying before the first."
the first test/exam?
in the same block of text as previous 'error'.

as Downfall paces back in forth
back and forth*
1st block of text right before taking the first breaking exam.

"whether or not you'll learn an equipment upgrade"
earn*
the first time your GPA is checked.

As soon as your school opens, that changes.
as soon as your school opened, that changed*
after responding to the protesters by being tactful

"and urges him stay still."
to stay still*
when c-wom attempts to squeeze through the door in the section where uni's group has arrived at the school for the meet n greet thingamajig

"pulling down the stretchy material downward"
get rid of the 'down'
same section as previous.

"No one says much one the way out."
on the way out*
after selecting the MC's response to the parent question during the school interview

"What topic do predict will cause the most trouble for Tress?"
what topic do you ...*
as the press interview starts when the MC is prompted to pick her opinion.

"You lose track of Contrarian in all the confusion"
no typo, but usually she's mentioned as 'the Contrarian'.
as the contrarian leaves the press interview

"She bits her bottom lip"
bites*
when trying to get tress to open the door after the press thing goes sour.

"the entire study body"
student body*
first scene after receiving texts from the dean

"They shoot into the sky as Wombat approaches Hedonist"
the hedonist?
when the hedonist is performing his defense demonstration on the farm.

"Hedonist never even moves."
the hedonist?
scene after wombat crashes into the hedonist

"As your analyze your professor's comment"
you*
during the scene with nil after downfall reveals what's required for the finals.

"roboticy is not a word"
it should be
sorry for tossing in a joke

"Who is willing to betray their friends' for a better grade?"
i believe that's an unnecessary ' after friends
page after having asked nil regarding the mysterious reward

"trying the arms under her chin and resting the bulk of the sweater on top of her head"
tying*
2d HELL study group with origami and mob.

"although that would be quiet dramatic"
quite*
2d defense study group, c-wom

"Although you're focused primarily on defense during the paintball session, your team also incorporates speed into other practice sessions,"
you've*
after winning the paint-ball exercise

"perhaps there's online tutorial?"
an online ...*
c-wom during the "i've never" game

"Tress channels her confident, poised demeanor from early in the now-notorious press conference from over a month ago."
... from earlier in the ...*
same "i've never" scene

"Since everyone the group other than Shine has flown before, everyone chokes down a pepper."
Since no one in the group has flown before besides Origami, she has to down a pepper.*
"i've never" after tress' handcuff confession.


almost done with my 8th and final playthrough, probably going to make some sort of achievement guide. but i will try to keep an eye open for any more typo's that slipped through the cracks. :)

[AceHangman]

'The next time you bump into C-Wom he is dressed in his full wombat armor. Clunking up to you, his points an accusatory metal finger hard in your direction. "Ah, do you betrayed my confidence, you...you...betrayer of confidences!"'

Change 'his' to 'he' and remove the 'do'.
After reporting Combat Wombat's violation of the school's secrecy policy.

[AceHangman]

Oh yeah, typos and grammatical style are my specialty. You've opened your can of worms.

• You could keep arguing, but truthfully you're not sure you'd win the argument. There's so much ammunition to use against Speck it's difficult to convince people that the program still needs a chance to grow and succeed.
  
  Speck is the town, so that might be confusing if you're trying to identify the Hero program at Speck Community College.
  During the protest rally outside the college.
  
  
• Uni laughs off the question. "Well, sugar, Mega Cat is very busy up makin' sure those baddies in the Diabolical Dozen don't cause anymore trouble! We'd love to meet him one day but he doesn't know us yet."
  
  Could just be Uni's way of speaking, but I think the 'up' is a leftover from an unused version of the sentence.
  During the conference in the elementary school.
  
  
• Uni chuckles and buys some time to figure out a respond, finally settling on, "Hush your mouth! You'll make me blush!"
  
  Should be 'response'. When the boy in the elementary school asks Uni to be his girlfriend.
  
  
• No one says much one the way out. You suspect they're all thinking about the last girl's question and your response.
  
  Should be 'on' instead of 'one. Leaving the elementary school meeting.
  

[Vance Finiraldi]

Originally posted by JadeCiku:

Not sure if this is a bug or it is like that because most of the time when a choice is not available, it is not visible.

Archtype : Acrobat
Gender : Female

1) Page : At the page where I am to select uniform.
Description : The selection "a revealing outfit covering just enough to avoid arrest" is visible but not selectable. Text appears in a lighter shade of grey instead of the regular black.

2) Page :At the page where "What extra touch do you add?"
Description: "leather thigh high boots with three inch heels" is grayed out.

For posterity, any options like the above that are visible but unselectable and in grayed-out text are not bugs; that's deliberate programming on the author's part. If an author using ChoiceScript wants to apply conditions to a choice, but has no need hide it like one would do with choices that conflict with plot branches, then they can simply do this.

In this case, they're like that because you picked a class that's been given a leather jacket (which conflicts with a revealing outfit) and skates for movement (which conflict with the heels).

[AceHangman]

• She stops her respond mid-sentence, as if stumped about what to say next.
  
  Should be 'response'. When you ask if Tress wants to take a shower with you.
  
  
• Shine in particularly looks frightened as he exits the house, muttering to himself, "I think...I think I messed it up."
  
  Should be 'particular'. During the interviews by Captain California.
  
  
• Soon, you'll be back in the fray, trying to complete with Zenith classmates as the only normal student at the school.
  
  Should be 'compete'. On the bus, leaving school for Winter break.

[AceHangman]

• Unfortunately, you can't spot anything that can help you. Mob's first slams into your stomach and you crumple to the ground.
  
  Should be 'fist'. Happens when you fail to use your surroundings against Mob in Downfall's first class.
  
• It would have been helpful livin' in California or something, but it was a sucky power to have Birmingham....oops!" she immediately clamps her hand over her mouth.
  
  Insert 'in' between 'have' and 'Birmingham'. Unicorn Fish Girl's secret.
  
  
• "Daddy says most folks have a filter 'tween what they think and what they say. He figures I born without one of those."
  
  Insert 'was' between 'I' and 'born' or even a 'wuz'. UnicornFishGirl talking about... why she's always talking.
  
  
• Wombat freezes at Tress's touch and stammers. "...I do prefer to understand the rules...when I game...perhaps there's online tutorial?"
  
  Insert 'an' between 'there's' and 'online'. Wombat learning the rules to 'I never...' during the slumber party.
  
  
• Something else I need to mention, you tend to use 'clinch' in almost every instance when 'clench' is the proper form. While similar in meaning, 'clench' is typically used when body parts are involved; fingers, fists, jaws, etc. 'Clinch' would be for closing a deal or contract or for closing off a pipe or something.
  
  
• Possible error for me, when I finally won the Leadership vote, at the end of the game there was no save option for Community College Hero 2. Usually you have the text line for adding in a name to save the game under. Maybe it was just a momentary glitch. Was also the first time playing as Acrobat, Non-binary gender.
  

[EricMoser_CCHAuthor]

Wow! Thanks for all the catches. It's a little embarrassing, really. I had about 90 beta testers going over the story for these types of typos. I'm shocked so many mistakes went undiscovered. The fixes will be included in the update that will roll out in January.

[AceHangman]

• You launch yourself at both players, managing to clip them both and take them out of the play. Your Kevlar jacket soaks up most of the impact. You hear a sideline observer yell, "Damn!"
  
  I didn't have a Kevlar jacket, I had a leather jacket. Blocking both players during the Scrimmage.
  
  
• Choosing to attack Downfall in the Final test (as acrobat) says I smash her in the jaw with my police baton, even though I did not receive that equipment upgrade and only had brass knuckles.
  
  
• Dirty Girl stops right up and clamps you in crushing hug. She mumbles, "Thanks," and rests her head on your chest.
  
  Replace 'stops' with 'stomps' or 'steps'. Bailing Dirty Girl out of jail.
  

[Grey]

".. to reveal shock of golden hair .."
reveal a shock of golden hair? not sure, i had to google what a shock of hair even was :D
captain cali's first appearance

[EricMoser_CCHAuthor]

I addressed the bugs and typos! Thanks for your help, everyone!

Hopefully the update will go through by mid-January at the latest.

[AceHangman]

• You shakes Stoic's hand and compliment her strategy.
  
  Should be 'shake'. After defeating Rain and Shine in the faculty parking lot.
  
  
• You plant your back foot and break into a spring.
  
  Should be 'sprint.' Chasing down UnicornFishGirl during the Gauntlet.
  
  
• "So...Tress, is it? So the way I understand your school's position, is that you're telling us...you're telling all of us," and Rycliff motions with his tablet to the hundreds of people in attendance, "that it's just a totally unexplainable coincidence that this lunatic terrorist targets our city the very day your so-called hero training school opens for business and that's there no connection whatsoever?"
  
  Should be 'that' and 'there's'. Apostrophe 's' on the wrong word. Daniel Rycliff questioning Tress during the press conference.
  
  
• Your struggle to process all of the bad news. What's the worst part of this?
  
  Should be 'You'. When finding out that the Hero Program has been cancelled.