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finish - I don't quite understand what this is
There is music, there is voice acting for animations, but there is no full voice acting for dialogues.
This is a great concept, but I think the story does need a little fleshing out. Keep in mind that this is YOUR story and my remarks are only suggestions for you, not direct criticism. How you ultimately write it is up to you, and a lot may be already too far along for you to change easily. It's a great story already.
**** Beware - Spoilers Ahead, You have been warned****
1. If the MC starts as a loser and slacker, he shouldn't have cared about man-scaping yet. He should have still have a full bush. Man-scaping is something to save until after Bella, heck have Bella do it for him after or during the first time seggs as part of "Cleaning him up" for the host job.
2. Let MC get way closer to the big O before Chloe barges in. MC should be leaky from his tip and have a wet shaft.
3. Bella's a little TOO fast... LoL. As much as I enjoyed the Virginity loss scene, (And I did) I wish the virginity loss would be a little more teasing and drawn-out... into a few separate scenes, and maybe even including the 43-yr old Annabelle too. He's so inexperienced, he should need to be taught everything - He should be much more shy about seggs and afraid to touch girls before his first time. Have Bella (and other girls) do the leading/touching/guiding more.
3. The club host job should take longer to get and master. It's a mid-game goal, the first bar job should last longer and run parallel along with the gym coaching as it starts to do.
-Important- That first bar job should NOT end after one night, but more like after 2-3 weeks. (About 3 different scenes) That sweet bar hostess needs more early in-game time.
5. Bella and her snatching MCs virginity scene is well placed, just do it after 2-3 Bar scenes of MC getting teased by that sweet hostess. That last bar hostess scene can stay as is. Just let her play and fantasize with MC's c*ck a few times before that BJ and the manager finds and fires him. (Just look and fantasize 1rst night, Touch and stroke (and measure him?) on the 2nd night, and the bingo BJ scene 3rd night w/getting caught before MC finishes.) MC still has his full bush all the way through this.
6. Let Bella Man-scape him before finally taking his virginity. He should be very leaky from the tip during this, and Bella should tease him about it while manipulating it to shave him.
Leave all of the other school bullying and associated content alone, that part's great.
That's it for now... I haven't finished the story fully yet, but you've got me hooked, so to speak.
-Don
1) At the end of the route in the story with one of the girls, in the final scene with the girl we choose, will it be possible to get her pregnant?
2) Will there be a storyline for each girl depending on which one we choose?
3) Will we be able to choose the type of relationship, meaning whether it will be romantic or more submissive
From what I've played, I liked it, I just hope you can improve it a lot more. You know, one always wants to have choices
Hello! Thanks for the feedback!
It's really impossible to rework already finished content, what has been rendered once. We would have to start from scratch, which, as you understand, is already too late, and it would be too much work to redo. And honestly, I don't see the point in adding "realism" to the game; this game is about an unrealistic situation, and that's where I see its main appeal. I think we all have enough reality in our real lives, so this game is a kind of escape from reality, and many things are exaggerated and outright absurd situations. If we wanted to go towards realism, we would need to make a completely different game :)
Hi! Glad to hear about it!
1. No, this is not planned, but maybe after the release, there will be some bonus content. We will see based on the final user requests what to add. Maybe we will do a poll on Discord.
2. There will only be the option to choose the final relationship setup, which will affect the final impression of the story more than the long-term development of relationships that unfolds in the game.
3. Unfortunately, no, but in the next game that is planned after we finish this one - yes, the relationships between the main characters can develop differently...
I think it would be useful to display the thoughts the MC can hear with a different style. They could have a different color, be italicized and/or not use the ** but something else. Ren'Py has tons of options to stylize text, and I think they're under-used.
Some players will have a unique name, which makes it difficult to believe that he isn't getting recognized.
Edit: Nevermind... MC suddenly has a pseudonym. Still, would've been nice if this was set up in advance, with bonus points for it being chosen by the player.