Neeeds more humor

[Couch_Warrior]

OK, played the demo. Here's a bit of feedback. The game flow and puzzle difficulty are good - similar to what people are used to in this type of game. If there is one critique, I would say ADD MORE HUMOR! The protagonist is a lame dweeb, but the motivation to play relies on the user to have sympathy for him. He needs to be a little more self-deprecating, and you should add some jokes at his expense. And in general, just more humor. I mean besides dogs humping things. Give the characters names that are a play on words spoofing known celebrities. Maybe a politician who hides in the closet named "Joe Hidin". Or a Business tycoon with a fat derriere named "Donald Rump". A TV news host that is a sock puppet named Jen Socky. Maybe a running joke about Jerry getting in trouble for peeping in peoples windows? Have a homeless guy see Jerry's bicycle, assume it belongs to a girl, and steal the seat for his "scratch and sniff" collection, then Jerry has to trade him something smarmy in return. You can ask demo players for joke suggestions. And this may just be me, but having the devil offer to buy people's souls at the end of the demo may NOT be the best enticement to purchase the game when it is released? Good luck.