Story mistakes"spoiler"

[Texus]

It seems like the character is still answering his father even if he left already.
He said Of course to himself in that chase.

That and I believ I could tell the mother I was mayor when it didn't happened.

[Winterlook Games]

Hi Texus,

we will look into it. Thanks for the feedback!

[Texus]

Originally posted by Winterlook Games:

Hi Texus,

we will look into it. Thanks for the feedback!

There is another thing but I'm unsure about it because it happend rather late and I don't wuite remember finishing the quest.

I have gotten a book for Jay. Now I don't remember if I had given it to her or went trough another circle of the girls before getting to her again.

I believe I had read something similar in another tread and I'm curious if the item just vanished. What is the current progress you can get with her? I'm doing the romance route, should have done it with everyone.

The same thing with the mother. I remember having to get her pickels, but I'm pretty sure I haven't done that yet. Anyway, I noticed Jay doesn't have that option to ask her about them.

edit: If you see the achive in your office it tells you twice how much you have.




edit: Okay After getting to be the mayor I had the option to give her the book.

[Winterlook Games]

Hi Texus,

If you have gotten the romance picnic with Jay, you should have given her the book already. Currently you can have a date with her, both romance and mb. The other quests will be implemented in the future.

[Texus]

There are some timing problems, nothing big for me but it could break the immersion I suppose.
I suppose if you remember to take another look at it closer to the final release it would be okay.

If I haven't loaded a different file or got interrupted, I had talked with Kira about the daughter and then a few days later they talk about the baby and I get told it's a girl form her.

To me it should have happened the other way around.

[Texus]

I started the corruption route today and during the scene with Angela...it's nothing big and I'm unsure if I want to mention it, but she has some fluids on her breast that are unmentioned and the main char is described to fall into the chair I believe, when he sits on the bed.

I guess these are more small things that could destroy what little immersion these moments might create? You have those moments here and there, but I also understand it might not as easy as I image such changes sometimes.

edit: I don't mind whatever fluid that is supposed to be, I just notice stuff like that when it might not fit what I'm reading.

[Winterlook Games]

Hi Texus,
it must be one of the pregnancy scenes, we will look into it. Is it the ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ scene?

[Texus]

Originally posted by Winterlook Games:

Hi Texus,
it must be one of the pregnancy scenes, we will look into it. Is it the ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥ scene?

The scene that I mean was the first one you get I believe when you use those pills. (Angela corruption route)

Not sure if you mean that a wrong scene was played there, but I just thought what was described and what I saw wasn't fitting perfectly what I saw.

[Winterlook Games]

We will make the adjustments to make it fit better to the actual scene. We were thinking of the wrong scene. Thanks for the report!

[plurke33]

- the dad not leaving as expected and suddenly seeing him later open the door is annoying bug.

- dunno if bug or not implemented yet. But so far i got all the upgrades for my andriod but tiffany still gives the option and now always says didn't find anything.
- i just wondered is normal cause we will "later" put in more upgrades to find or it's a bug.

[Winterlook Games]

Hi plurke33,
thank you for your report. Can you describe where you have encountered Oscar? After going to the surface or to the settlement?
The other two things are not bugs.

[kencyr]

Recommended updates. As an irony I am commenting on grammar and such. no comment on mine please. I know it stinks thank you verruh much. All justifications are based on my suggested dialog..so it makes sense to me. All items are in my opinion etc...
NONE of this is to be taken as sharpshooting/negative - think of them as tester reports.

Sequence is from start of game to choice of partners. Items do not go past selection dialog (was her serious node)

Friends selection:

<dialog> 'what about you and Kira?' - 'she left home and joined the army without my approval'; inconsistent with friends selection

<Event sequence> Water filter find - you find the water filter before the dialog. Sequence: ...check boxes to find the much needed water filter, <find water filter>, ...clean radiation from it, ..you spend around half an hour, suddenly, you hear...
Recommend <find water filter> animation after 3rd dialog pane.

<grammar> Tiffany meeting event - dialog: ...she doesn't seem to look like she was in bad health.
Recommend correcting tense to present tense (is not in bad health)

<potential dialog> Tiffany meeting event - dialog: ...but she doesn't want to fight you. Recommend change to 'she doesn't seem to want to'. original dialog indicates hostile introduction.

<potential dialog>Tiffany meeting event - dialog:..left you shelter just recently/Yes. Just trying to pick up things left behind.
Recommend change to 'trying to pick up some things'. Original dialog indicates permanently staying out of shelter, recommended dialog indicates temporary visit.

<grammar> Tiffany meeting event - dialog: I guess your shelter send you. Change to past tense (shelter sent you)

<potential dialog> Tiffany meeting event - dialog: water filter you picked up/it is more complicated,
Recommend change to 'it is more complicated than that'. sentence seems incomplete.

<potential dialog> Tiffany meeting event - dialog <selection> what can you offer for food <answer>
Recommend change facemask to protective mask (or mask). Protective mask is 'more correct' in the circumstance.


<dialog> Tiffany meeting event - dialog <selection> who are you <answer> A Merchant. change Merchant to lower case m

<potential dialog><grammar>Tiffany meeting event - dialog: <selection> who are you <answer> So far I was able...
Recommend matching tenses (I was able to survive, or So far I have been able to survive)

<potential dialog>Tiffany meeting event - dialog: <selection> who are you <answer> ...what about you/I would not like to share ..
Recommend change to I don't want to share. Would indicates choice do not indicates unwillingness.

<potential dialog> Tiffany meeting event - dialog: <selection> I will see you later <answer> I will be here tomorrow and after.
Recommend change to tomorrow OR I will be around here for a while to match remaining sentence(s)

<potential dialog>Tiffany meeting event - dialog: Do not worry, I won't...
Recommend matching contractions or using full words. mixing them in this context is odd.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog:...spraying you down with an anti radioactive liquid..
Recommend change to 'anti-radiation liquid'. the spray down is to reduce radiation coming into the shelter.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog:...he swaps out the water filter...
Recommend change to 'he takes the contaminated filter and places it in a sealed box'. Provides clarity of actions taken by Oscar.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog:...you are in a shower...
Recommend change to you are in the shower. there is no indication of more than one shower in the shelter.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog:...on your way, before you can see him argue...
Recommend change to before he starts arguing with Angela'. if accepted then recommend adding text to indicate Angela approaching or presence. (..on your way. As you are leaving you see Angela approach and they start arguing)

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog:...died there...
Recommend change to died up there. better indication of location.

<dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog:...you return to your room.....that girl seem fine'...change seem to seemed.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog:...you return to your room.....living without a protective suit'...
Recommend change to '...suit and mask' to better match dialog while on surface. (extra 'protective' not needed as that is implied in the construction of protective suit and mask)

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog: what if we can'...
Recommend change to '. what if we could. (this one is iffy. )

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog: thoughts are stopped by..
Recommend change to 'thoughts are interrupted'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter event - dialog: <kira> how are you/I am fine, just didn't..recommend change to 'I'm fine, just didn't'
Recommend matching contractions or using full words. mixing them in this context is odd.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter Kira event - dialog: <kira> That is fascinating. For how long....
Recommend change to '..fascinating. How long..' cleaner sentence construction.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter Kira event - dialog: <kira> does that mean we can try to get outside...
Recommend change to '..go outside'. Player has already been outside, so clearly shelter occupants can get outside.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter Kira event - dialog: <Oscar> it is a foolish idea. ...can you even imagine...
Recommend change to '..that is a foolish idea. In here we are safe. Can you even imagine how many raiders there are out there? Mutants?....
<comment - people that lost their minds line seems stiff. no suggestions though.>

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter Kira event - dialog: <kira>it is worth a try..
Recommend change to 'it was worth a try' (present vs past tense)

<dialog> first returning to shelter Kira event - dialog: <Oscar>..Right now I need to speak with him alone, now..
Recommend change to 'Right now I need to speak with him alone'. second now is repetitive

<dialog> first returning to shelter Kira event - dialog: <Kira panel>.nods, despite wanting to spend some time with you first..
Recommend change to 'wanting to spend more time with you'. She already got to spend time with Player first.

(this is where i get lazy(er) and stop justifications for changes)

<dialog> first returning to shelter Kira event - dialog: <Kira panel>.when you can....
Recommend change to 'when you are done' as you move to her room when done with Oscar

<dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event - dialog:Finally, can't stand their nonsense...
Recommend change to 'nonsense he mutters, before addressing you ' or 'Finally, mutters, can't...'

<dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event - dialog:..how can't they see.....
Recommend change to 'Why can't they see'

<dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event - dialog:.she won't last even for a month.....
Recommend change to 'she won't last another month'

<question><potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event - dialog:..water filter, son..... in friends route is Oscar still the father? (I may have missed that detail)

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event - dialog:Because of that, I allow you to.....recommend change to 'I will allow you to...'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<player> - dialog:Or I can trade with that girl.....
Recommend change to 'sounds good, and I can trade with that girl before she dies, as you say'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Oscar> - dialog: Or take whatever you like from her after.....
Recommend change to ' Or take whatever you like from her corpse after she dies'

<potential dialog><grammar> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Oscar> - dialog: like to ask your opinion about one thing.....
Recommend change to 'One more thing, I would like to ask you to do something, but first you must promise me you will not tell anyone about it regardless if you agree or refuse to do it.' (Oscar isn't asking your opinion, he is actually giving Player THE task, and Player response indicates task as well)

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Oscar> - dialog: As you can see, women in our group....
Recommend change to '..see, the women in our group aren't thinking straight'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Oscar> - dialog: If I didn't send you outside immediately, but ask their opinion...
Recommend change to 'If I had asked their opinion about sending you out to get the water filter, we would've been drinking mud by tomorrow'


<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Oscar> - dialog: That is why we need to lead them....
Recommend change to 'That is why we must lead them. If we are to survive and advance from here - if we are to rebuild our society, we must repopulate'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Player> - dialog: Agree, but.....
Recommend change to " I agree, but..'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Oscar> - dialog: that is why I am not talking about them....
Recommend change to "I am not talking about her. I am talking about our friends here in the shelter. I think we might be...'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Oscar> - dialog:..have children, that....
Recommend change to 'have children. (period, not comma) That leaves only you'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Player> - dialog: you think they will agree to that offer...
Recommend change to 'You think they will agree to this?'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event<Oscar> - dialog:.do it smartly ...
Recommend change to 'do it intelligently...'

<dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <Kira selection> <Oscar> ...I would advice...
Recommend change to 'I would advise'

< dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <Melissa selection> <Oscar> ...I would advice...
Recommend change to 'I would advise'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <Melissa selection> <Oscar> ..find the reasons making her so sad...
Recommend change to 'find the reason she is so sad..'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <Angela selection> <Player> .You were always busy with work....
Recommend change - UNKNOWN. current dialog indicates family not friends route. Oscars reply indicates family not friend.

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <Angela selection> <Oscar> I think carry one or two children'.
Recommend change- ..two children more, before you will have to find another mate. If you want her...'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <Angela selection> <Player> thanks I guess'
Recommend change-"I do" (player has a plan to approach Angela)

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <All selection> <Oscar>..problem is how they might get..
Recommend change- 'problem is they might get..'

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <All selection> <Oscar> How conflicts might emerge..
Recommend change- 'Conflicts might emerge between them, if you favor one over the others, but...'

<dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <All selection> <Player> 'I got it, now, '
Recommend change-' I got it. Now.. (period, not comma)

<potential dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <None selection> <Player> I don't think radiation screwed them that much, that it is less risky to start impregnation around here'
Recommend change- 'I don't think radiation messed them up that much, and I think it is less risky to impregnate them'

<dialog> first returning to shelter second Oscar event <None selection> <Oscar>..was right, but that will be too late'
Recommend change- '..but by then it will be too late'

[Winterlook Games]

Hi kencyr, thank you for your report, we will look into the matter.

[plurke33]

When doing Jay date,i think there is a mistake when you choose
i'm not looking to become a father. the next text you say is " i would actually like to have them"
this is same text when you choose you want kids.

[plurke33]

also when i did choose 3 woman in shelter to date. i tried to get mother pregnant first spend like days over it before progessing with the others seems that isn't possible. i had to progress untill all three were in good romance route. Dunno if that is normal when you choose 3 woman.

[Winterlook Games]

Hi plurke33, we will look into the issues you mentioned. Thank you for the report.