What is going on with the writing?

[Jen Blue(She/They/Hers)]

Is this cringe supposed to be funny?

[Paradoxiicall]

worst take I've ever seen tbfh

[Original Cast Recording]

Ursprünglich geschrieben von Jo Moéstar:

Ursprünglich geschrieben von edge_braak:

This isn't that bad because it's mostly at least charming, but I feel it's trying a bit too hard in every line, when it could do with a little more clean writing between the jokes.

My feelings exactly, really. I don't think the humor is bad at all, and in fact it's mostly great. I wouldn't mind a little more space between the jokes, though.

Same. I got a few genuine laughs, but not every line needs to be swinging for the fences. I could see it being difficult to maintain that momentum for the whole game. (Maybe the tone becomes more serious as the story progresses? Without abandoning humor altogether.)

[Droopy The Dog]

Topic starter couldn't even finish writing a username without being cringe, do you really want to start stoning other people's writing like that?

[EliTheRev]

I think there is very little else that is more cringe than saying something is cringe.

[maru]

Ursprünglich geschrieben von EliTheRev:

I think there is very little else that is more cringe than saying something is cringe.

You smelled it, you dealt it.

[Gogh and Bosch torture]

Yup, unfunny and inconsequential dialogue all around, with pacing also (seemingly) messed up. Good thing they aren't hiding the level of this mess

[Jo Moéstar]

Mans was so flustered over it he had to rant about it twice.

[The_stealthiest_tank]

Literally my ideal humour