My Trailer for FNAF. Is this good enough for the Store Page?

[filthy faygo]

This summer I've started making some trailers for indie games like FNAF. I made a few really good ones for some other games considering my amateur level in filmmaking/editing, but no developer ever game me a real shot, despite how I hard I worked. I recently made 2 trailers for FNAF. If you guys don't mind checking out the new trailer I made for Five Nights at Freddy's, and if you didn't see my other one, that one also. Please give me some feedback if you watch them, as I'm really hoping that Scott Cawthon, the developer, will put one of them on the Store Page. Please let me know if you think that one or both of these trailers are good enough to be featured on the Store Page. It really would mean the world to me if you guys could check this out for me. Cheers :)

2nd Trailer: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X86gWrPf7jo&feature=youtu.be

1st Trailer: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FaW0XKqGhbo&list=UUROlxXvwgR0i05LrxkUYkMA

[Dust]

After viewing the 2nd trailer, there's 3 things I have qualms with:

#1: The cut from the in-game footage to the trailer footage with the animatronics looking at the camera. It's noticably jarring and would probably do you better just using the full trailer footage for that scene.

#2: The font. I feel it doesn't fit the style of the game, and personally, I think the original font in the trailer fits better.

#3: The lack of sound, it just doesn't work too well. The static transitions have no noise, and there's very little noise at all.

Now with that being said, both trailers are quite well done and I think they hold up well. Just maybe look for a method to record without it getting your mouse, seeing that kind of messes with the trailers.

[Peanut Buster]

Pretty good, but I do prefer your first one to the second one.

[filthy faygo]

Dusty926님이 먼저 게시:

After viewing the 2nd trailer, there's 3 things I have qualms with:

#1: The cut from the in-game footage to the trailer footage with the animatronics looking at the camera. It's noticably jarring and would probably do you better just using the full trailer footage for that scene.

#2: The font. I feel it doesn't fit the style of the game, and personally, I think the original font in the trailer fits better.

#3: The lack of sound, it just doesn't work too well. The static transitions have no noise, and there's very little noise at all.

Now with that being said, both trailers are quite well done and I think they hold up well. Just maybe look for a method to record without it getting your mouse, seeing that kind of messes with the trailers.

First off, thank you so much for the feedback. I really do appreciate that you took the time to watch them both. For the first issue, it's definitely something I could fix. I'll just take the clip from the original trailer. For the second, I'm not exactly sure what the font was from the original trailer, but if Mr. Cawthon is interested, I'll ask him what font he used. For the third one, I can see what you're saying. There are some clips where sound would probably benefit the overall experience. Such as in the second trailer with the pop-up at the end. I may change the static to just a fade to black effect, although I did feel that the static transition matched the feel of the game, being that you are often using screens/cameras. For the mouse thing, it's probably something that I won't be able to elimate easily, but in some scenes where it is very noticeable I can make the cursor less visible. Again, I really appreciate the constructive critiscm and I will definitely take your tips when refing the trailer if Mr. Cawthon shows interest. Thank you :)

[filthy faygo]

Virgil Tiber님이 먼저 게시:

Pretty good, but I do prefer your first one to the second one.

Thanks for the feedback! I definitely see what you're saying, as the first trailer is more concise and essentially captures the same feel that the second trailer goes for in half the time. The second trailer may still be a bit raw but I'll work to improve it. Thank you so much for taking the time to watch both trailers :)

[Peanut Buster]

drofdarb님이 먼저 게시:

Virgil Tiber님이 먼저 게시:

Pretty good, but I do prefer your first one to the second one.

Thanks for the feedback! I definitely see what you're saying, as the first trailer is more concise and essentially captures the same feel that the second trailer goes for in half the time. The second trailer may still be a bit raw but I'll work to improve it. Thank you so much for taking the time to watch both trailers :)

Good luck :) I hope you can get it put on the store page.

[filthy faygo]

Dusty926님이 먼저 게시:

After viewing the 2nd trailer, there's 3 things I have qualms with:

#1: The cut from the in-game footage to the trailer footage with the animatronics looking at the camera. It's noticably jarring and would probably do you better just using the full trailer footage for that scene.

#2: The font. I feel it doesn't fit the style of the game, and personally, I think the original font in the trailer fits better.

#3: The lack of sound, it just doesn't work too well. The static transitions have no noise, and there's very little noise at all.

Now with that being said, both trailers are quite well done and I think they hold up well. Just maybe look for a method to record without it getting your mouse, seeing that kind of messes with the trailers.

Also realized the scene with the fox in trailer 2 could probably benefit from his screech :)

[filthy faygo]

Virgil Tiber님이 먼저 게시:

drofdarb님이 먼저 게시:

Thanks for the feedback! I definitely see what you're saying, as the first trailer is more concise and essentially captures the same feel that the second trailer goes for in half the time. The second trailer may still be a bit raw but I'll work to improve it. Thank you so much for taking the time to watch both trailers :)

Good luck :) I hope you can get it put on the store page.

Thank you so much :)

[Dust]

drofdarb님이 먼저 게시:

For the mouse thing, it's probably something that I won't be able to elimate easily, but in some scenes where it is very noticeable I can make the cursor less visible. Again, I really appreciate the constructive critiscm and I will definitely take your tips when refing the trailer if Mr. Cawthon shows interest. Thank you :)

Hmmm, well if you have some editing software, maybe it has some mouse options. I know mine has some options for the mouse during recording, you know the usual, blink when click, all that jazz. Maybe yours has something similar. Either way, glad to see you're willing to improve, that's quite a good start and shows only good things from you in the future!

[Dust]

Oh, and I think I have a lead on the font thing:

See Five Nights at Heavy's, the guy who made it seems to have found the font, see if he's willing to tell 'ya what it is.

[filthy faygo]

Dusty926님이 먼저 게시:

drofdarb님이 먼저 게시:

For the mouse thing, it's probably something that I won't be able to elimate easily, but in some scenes where it is very noticeable I can make the cursor less visible. Again, I really appreciate the constructive critiscm and I will definitely take your tips when refing the trailer if Mr. Cawthon shows interest. Thank you :)

Hmmm, well if you have some editing software, maybe it has some mouse options. I know mine has some options for the mouse during recording, you know the usual, blink when click, all that jazz. Maybe yours has something similar. Either way, glad to see you're willing to improve, that's quite a good start and shows only good things from you in the future!

Sorry to bother you again, but can you tell me what editing software you use? I can't really afford any expensive editing software so I'm kind of stuck with Windows Movie Maker xD, and I use Xsplit to record. Thank you again, btw :)

[filthy faygo]

Dusty926님이 먼저 게시:

Oh, and I think I have a lead on the font thing:

See Five Nights at Heavy's, the guy who made it seems to have found the font, see if he's willing to tell 'ya what it is.

Thanks for that info too, I'll look into that! :) I really do appreciate all the help, it means so much to me :)

[Dust]

drofdarb님이 먼저 게시:

Dusty926님이 먼저 게시:

Hmmm, well if you have some editing software, maybe it has some mouse options. I know mine has some options for the mouse during recording, you know the usual, blink when click, all that jazz. Maybe yours has something similar. Either way, glad to see you're willing to improve, that's quite a good start and shows only good things from you in the future!

Sorry to bother you again, but can you tell me what editing software you use? I can't really afford any expensive editing software so I'm kind of stuck with Windows Movie Maker xD, and I use Xsplit to record. Thank you again, btw :)

Well I use Camtasia Studio, but that costs money, and I don't know of any good free editing software. Sorry 'bout that.

[filthy faygo]

Dusty926님이 먼저 게시:

drofdarb님이 먼저 게시:

Sorry to bother you again, but can you tell me what editing software you use? I can't really afford any expensive editing software so I'm kind of stuck with Windows Movie Maker xD, and I use Xsplit to record. Thank you again, btw :)

Well I use Camtasia Studio, but that costs money, and I don't know of any good free editing software. Sorry 'bout that.

Haha no problem :) I'm definitely going to save up for a better editing software though

[Crab Rango]

Unfortunately, I doubt that Scott will be taking any fan projects, like this trailer, and use them for his content. I wish he would, because these trailers are amazing. But I doubt Scott would do such a thing. Sorry dude.